Here is your #FWF Free Write Friday prompt: Fall WordÂ Bank
Â foliage â€“ amber â€“ wicker â€“ aroma â€“ sweater â€“ cocoa
Steam rose slowly upward from the hot cup of cocoa sitting on the table in front of him.Â The old wicker chair creaked as he leaned forward and splashed the remaining contents of the bottle into the cup.Â Leaning back he picked up the cup and settling in took a long drink of the hot liquid.Â It burned but not from the heat but from the liquid that had been inside the bottle.Â His head fell back against the chair as his eyes closed.Â The warmth sped down his throat and into the pit of his stomach.
He sat outside his little home by himself in the still quiet of late evening.Â Wearing an old worn sweater that she had always commented on how she loved it on him.Â It was beginning to fray at the seams and collar but what did he care, no one came to see him.Â He took another drink and again leaned back closing his eyes and resting. The warmth began to radiate out to his limbs and e felt a small sense of peace in that moment.
Slowly he opened his eyes staring up a the late autumn foliage of the surrounding trees.Â The leaves were changing colors but in the darkening light they all appeared a mono-chromatic brown.Â Seemed fitting, nothing special, nothing to set them apart so he thought.Â He the smelled the noticeable aroma of wood smoke wafting up from nearby chimneys.Â Fires burned in the surrounding homes giving a warmth and light to the people inside.Â Something he longed to feel.
Here he sat alone as he watched the last fading amber light of the sun.Â It dipped beyond the horizon plunging the night into darkness.Â He looked up his mind reeling, his body slowly becoming numb.Â Seeing the twinkling of a thousand stars beginning to appear in rhythm with the beating of his heart.Â The silence was overwhelming as a single glistening tear rolled slowly down his cheek.Â Then he heard faintly the singing that was carried on the wind as a small smile appeared on his lips.
Mark Schutter Â©2013Â
The above was written for Free Write Friday from the word bank promptÂ at the top of the page using what is called stream of consciousness writing, no editing, no proofing just writing! Please check out Kellie Elmoreâ€™s official site or click on the Free Write Friday Image for more information.Â Post your submission with a comment and link to your blog on Kellieâ€™s blog, post on twitter with the hashtag #FWF, Facebook and join the fun!
Oh Mark … that is so lovely and sad at the same time … sitting in my favorite wicker chair with tears in my eyes … I want to know the rest of his story … just beautiful.
Thank you Annie! When I finished it did seem their was a lot more to this story. Who knows? 🙂 I could definitely feel the emotions when writing this one.
This is incredible indeed. My only criticism would be that it is over. I want the rest of the story. I loved this, thank you!
More to come? 🙂 Thanks!
Oh my goodness..so great!
Thank you so much Roberta!
A lonely man finding courage in a bottle and a voice on the autumn breeze. I can totally place myself there. He needs a hug. 😉 … Great work, Mark!
Thank you Dorothy! He definitely needs a hug! 🙂 I am honored that it made you feel those emotions.
Oh, Mark, how beautiful! There has to be more to this story! 🙂
I am thinking of expanding this one. What happened before and what happens next? 🙂 Thank you Sharla!
Lovely and sad. Felt his emotions and his attempt at the pain.
Thank you, this one come exactly from that place of pain.
Wow Mark! I loved the emotion in this story! i could feel the story. Like others have already said–there is more to the story yet to come. I feel like the man in the story will tell you the beginning and the end one day so you can share with us. 🙂
Wonder who the man is? 🙂 Maybe the beginning and ending is just waiting to be written, I think I need to quit my day job but bills … 🙂 Thanks so much Elaine!
I agree with one reader who said he needs a hug. Your story was so emotional it made me want to reach out to him. 🙁 And also, this was such a nice surprise…a story from you! Awesome treat! Thanks, Mark!
Thank you Kellie!
A story you say? Forgot to mention I just finished the rough draft of my first novel, read the post about it here > https://markschutter.com/2013/09/08/62000-words-whats-next/ I may be emailing you about publishing and publishers soon :)!
Quite pensive. I feel a sigh collecting in my chest, peaceful but sad, relating to this fellow.