carrying burdens forever
through a life of squandered unfulfilled dreams
reaching the razors tipping point of no return
forgiveness is sought at the King’s glorious hand
the journey is long and narrow
laying down burdens
~Mark Schutter Â©2014
(Poem #15 of 31 for October Poetry Writing Month, #OctPoWriMo.Â Inspired loosely on the prompt of ‘halfway’ from the OctPoWriMo 2014 website and the result of free writing.Â It is also my first attempt at writing in the style ofÂ Diatelle which is similar to the ethere style. Have a beautiful day! ~M)
I love the structure of the poem. It actually feels like a journey. Great work!
Thank you so much. This was a new style for me, glad you liked it. Thanks for commenting!
Oh yeah! You did an Etheree. I love experimenting with poetry forms. I’ve done a couple of Etherees myself. My latest I tried was a Monotetra. I had a blast doing it.
Thanks Staci! It is fun and challenging to try different styles.
That’s the plan, I guess. Easier said than done, though. I like the form.